People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Undoubtedly, due to a rapid increase in the availability of the internet and different social media, people have more access to a variety of sources to aquire different skills. Although some may believe it is better for people to focus on a single major, I personally assert that it is more advantageous for the people to learn assortment of skills. I feel this way for a couple of reasons that I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, having knowledge about various tasks, even not too much, may cause people to save money in their life. To be more specific, these days, the expenses of many tasks, such as electronic devices repair or different house stuff, has significantly increased. Thus, people who are able to make rehabiliations by themselves or can learn it from the internet, can save money, and use their money for more important things such as invest money on stock exchange market or buy a real state, which is beneficial for both themselves and children. On the other hand, a person who is unable to do such tasks, and has only focused on his own major, will be obligated to pay other people and componies to make that repair for him.
Moreover, people who are multi-tasking, are not concerned about losing their jobs, and can make themselves a job safety. There is no denying the fact that many companies, specially after Covid-19 pandemic, due to a severe financial situation have decided to reduce the number of their employees to make a reduction in their payements. In this situation, a person who has gained knowledge and experience in different fields, is more likely to find an other job. For instance, before the pandemic, my cousin was working for an electronic device company. Because of the pandemic, his boss told him he has to leave his job as they do not have enough money to pay for his salary. Although he was not satisfied, he did not have any choice but accepting the situation. In this situation, as he was an expert in graphic design by passing some courses in the internet, he applied for other companies as a graphic designer. Soon after losing his previous job, he started his new career.
To sum up, taking the aformentioned reasons into account, I am completely convinced that it is an asset for people who are adroit in different majors. This is not only because they would be able to save their money by doing many tasks by their own but also because they can always secure a job for themselves, even if they lose their main job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 18, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...t repair for him. Moreover, people who are multi-tasking, are not concerned about ...
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Line 6, column 448, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...ifferent fields, is more likely to find an other job. For instance, before the pandemic,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for instance, i feel, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70387243736 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62288195648 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492027334852 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7552945899 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.470588235 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8235294118 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191631473002 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684710925261 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636240259681 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135785083471 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449126468598 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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