People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Multitasked and experienced in different fields are the most important pillars of each society in today's world. Due to the fact, we live in a chaotic and fast-paced world, it is important for us to have several skills at the same time. A controversial question that is often raised regarding to this point is whether people who have different skills are successful or whether people who focus on one field. Some people possess the conviction that the latter is more beneficial, whereas I think, a person who has different skills is more successful. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs will represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating standpoint is that people who are multitasked have skilled brains. Their minds can process different tasks and they are able to analyze and notice to different diminsions. It goes without saying, they can rely on their mind's abilities and create better solutions for their problems. Consider engineers who have abilities in calculation and analyze. When they want to solve a problem, they know there are different featurs that can affect on the solutions and they choose better solutions. Thus, the driving force behind their success is their different skills.
The second rationale reason behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that multitasking and have different experiences, can increase a person's chance to get success, especially in job offerings. Consider my experience to make this point more clear. When I wanted to hire my staff, I was cautious about their work expreience and wanted them to do just one task. After a year, my company faced with overpopulation and our costs grew. At that time, my father told me I could hire a person who can able to do multitask and I could reduce the cost and increase the efficiency.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I think having different skills is more agreeable and we can achieve success because our solutions are more practical and, on the other hand, we have better opportunities. It is anticipated that for having better society, we have to plan to teach our people to be multitasked.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ow there are different featurs that can affect on the solutions and they choose better so...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...affect on the solutions and they choose better solutions. Thus, the driving force behi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, i think, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01652892562 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81373100465 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520661157025 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9391093001 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.166666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298986721628 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959908890011 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118632931856 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183029778627 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114663952089 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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