Brendan the Navigator was an Irish priest who lived in the 6th century He is most famous for embarking on a voyage in search of the mythical Island of the Blessed The details of Brendan s voyage recorded as stories in old manuscripts suggest to some that | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Brendan the Navigator was an Irish priest who lived in the 6th century. He is most famous for embarking on a voyage in search of the mythical “Island of the Blessed.” The details of Brendan's voyage, recorded as stories in old manuscripts, suggest to some that Brendan and his crew reached North America during their voyage, becoming the first Europeans to do so Those who advance this theory support it with several arguments
First, the written stories about Brendan’s voyage seem to make references to places his crew would have visited on the way to North America Sailors in Brendan's time typically traveled from island to island to avoid the dangers of long periods on the open seas A journey from Ireland to North America would have taken Brendan to the Faroe Islands. Iceland, and Greenland before reaching the North American continent (see illustration). Places described in the stories about Brendan’s voyage share characteristics with some of those island locations.
Second, a team of researchers recently constructed a boat resembling a curragh, an old Irish boat of the type used by Brendan Curraghs had a wooden frame with cowhides stretched over it. In building the boat, the researchers used only materials and techniques available in Brendan’s time. The researchers were able to sail this boat from Ireland to North America, demonstrating that boat technology in Brendan’s time was sufficient for a journey across the Atlantic Ocean
Third, old markings that may have a connection to Brendan’s voyage have been discovered at several locations in North America Cut into rocks, these markings consist of narrow vertical lines resembling letters of ogham, an old Irish alphabet in frequent use in Brendan’s time. The resemblance of those marks to ogham has convinced some that the markings were made by members of Brendan’s crew

Undoubtedly, success is an important term in every person's life. There are numerous definitions for success, varying from person to person. In this regard, there is a more important thing than success, how to behave while failures. Although some may prefer to stay pessimistic and sad after every failure in their life, I personally believe that it is more advantageous for each person to face with a defeat in a different way and be pessimistic. I feel this way for a couple of main reasons that I will elaborate in the following essay.

To begin with, it is neccasary to avoid getting upset after each fail to gain success again. To be more specific, people who are able to recover from previous challenges and learn lessons after fails, are more susceptible to find the way of victory. There are abundant examples of individuals who did not stop trying after they failed, so they gained a tremendous achievement. For instance, Tomas eddison invented electricity after thousands of unsuccessful laboratory experiments. Had not he continued his endeavors after defeats, he would have not invented electricity, the vital prerequisite of people in their life.

Moreover, peopel who are depressed after not gaining a significant achievement, may hurt themselves either mentally or physically, which even causes waste of money. Indeed, overthinking is the root of variety of disease that are not easy nor cheap to be cured. There are a variety of researches that have been conducted to prove the impact of stress on cancer. Scientist believe that there is direct relationship between cancer and stress. Moreover, a person who is depressed, can be mentally injured. In this situation, people avoid communicating with others and scape from talking to their friends and relatives. Thus, they may change to a alone people with a multiple mental problems, while they can significantly change their bad mood by interacting to their beloved ones, instead of going to a therapist.

To sum up, taking the aformentioned reasons into consideration, I am completely convinced that people should pass their failures and stay optimitic, not only because to learn lessons from their defeats and be successful again but also because they may hurt themselves, both physically and mentally.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
..., success is an important term in every persons life. There are numerous definitions fo...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s for each person to face with a defeat in a different way and be pessimistic. I feel this way for...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...e impact of stress on cancer. Scientist believe that there is direct relationship betwe...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Scientist) must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...e impact of stress on cancer. Scientist believe that there is direct relationship betwe...
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Line 5, column 641, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...and relatives. Thus, they may change to a alone people with a multiple mental pro...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...o a alone people with a multiple mental problems, while they can significantly change th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 368.0 270.72406181 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19836956522 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91991883117 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 145.348785872 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4048933845 49.2860985944 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.277777778 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 4.45695364238 269% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0451013028239 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0159987571364 0.0996497079465 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0151833134916 0.0662205650399 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0261450778708 0.162205337803 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190975117145 0.0443174109184 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 63.6247240618 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments