Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, gaining knowledge about countries' is an interesting topic for several people. This is because they would be able to know how people, both in the past and in the present, were living. There are a variety of ways to acquire information about countries. Although some may prefer to visit museums to know about a country, I personally believe that museums are not the best place to learn about different countries. I feel this way for a couple of main reasons that I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, museums do not reveal every thing about a country. To be more specific, during the history, the remains of ancient time may have been destroyed due to different happenings. Many countries have dealt with wars, which has caused annihilation of relic objects. Moreover, despite the high level of security in many museums, several remainings have been stolen. Thus, many important parts of each country's culture may be missed due to these occurances. For example, Iran has a well-known national museum. Some years ago, a group of unknown thieves stole a significant part of the museum, through a complicated plan. There were several handwritings of iranian celebrated poet "Ferdowsi" among the stolen things. As a result, a person who wants to know about iranian culture, would miss one of the greatest sections of this culture.
Moreover, nowadays, with the significant widespread of the Internet, people are widely provided with a variety of sources. In fact, using the Internet, people are able to choose the way that are more interested in. Some may prefer to read books about a country, while the others enjoy watching videos. Thus, the first group is offered with an assortment of books available online, and the latter group is provided with various sources of video like the Youtube. To take my own example, last year I was supposed to visit France for my Master's internship. I wanted to learn about France, how the people may behave, how the foods are there, and where can I visit during my voyage. I could find a great number of videos about each of single topics on the Youtube, that I was completely confused which one to choose. Finally, I selected some and collected useful data that was really helpful to me.
To sum up, taking the aforementioned reasons into account, I am personally convinced that museums are not the best place to find information about countries. This is because, not only museums are not completed, and may offer insufficient data about a country but also because there are other advantageous ways that people can choose according to their own taste.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 334, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...dvantageous ways that people can choose according to their own taste.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97058823529 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71792161955 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531674208145 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4038262972 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5416666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4166666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230465243023 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618877718912 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519514853489 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146290268894 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400811407616 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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