Students are better off staying with people from their own country or with people from other countries

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Students are better off staying with people from their own country or with people from other countries

In today’s modern world, we can see a great number of students that because of reasons, such as war, working condition, and state-of-the-art universities, to name but a few, go to other countries for pursuing their educational career. In this condition, they have two choices in choosing roommates. Some of them are of the opinion that choosing a native person as a roommate is a logical way, while others believe that being roommate with people who came from their country is the best manner. I agree with the first idea rather than the second one for two substantial reasons that will be presented here.
First, when students go to other country for pursuing their education career, they usually do not have a sufficient knowledge for communication with others. One of the best ways for strengthening our language being a roommate with people who are the native of that country. By doing so, in the daily communications that all roommates have, we are able to improve our oral skills. In addition, because these people live in that country, they are usually well-connected people and have a great deal of experience about that country, and we can use their experience about work condition in that country.
Second, any student who want to study in another country usually experiences cultural shock at the first step in that country, and this problem causes that those students become depressed. Therefore, the best way to overcome this problem being a roommate with native people from that country. Additionally, because every country has specific rules and cultures, by being a roommate with native people, we can adapt ourselves with their society. As a result, we are able to behave in a proper manner with other people at university and society, which help us to overcome problems such as cultural shock, and we can increase our resilience in that country.
In conclusion, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that being a roommate with native people has two valuable results. The first one is that we can improve our language skills those are necessary for living there. In addition, we are able to overcome some problems such as cultural shock and increase our adaptation in that country.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'sufficient knowledge'.
Suggestion: sufficient knowledge
...cation career, they usually do not have a sufficient knowledge for communication with others. One of t...
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Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ety. As a result, we are able to behave in a proper manner with other people at university and soc...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...lience in that country. In conclusion, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98924731183 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75506030183 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459677419355 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.186319517 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.733333333 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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