For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school

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For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school

Success is the role key for a progress life in the future. Some people think that the relation between people is the way for success. People think that the better relations will help people to easily coordinate. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that the important of studying hard in school is the most important way to proceed for better success. The basis of my opinion is educational, social, and personal.

From the educational perspective, studying in school is the fastest way for future success. Students in school study hard, they know that their education will help them to be more successful. For instance, children in school are studying a variety of subjects like, chemistry, biology, math, and so on. All these subjects will provide them with the valuable information they need to be more successful in their future life. Students in school are trying to work hard to succeed in their education and consequently in their future career.

Socially, students in school have the opportunity to deals and communicate with different kinds of people. In school students are vulnerable to work with each others. Working in a group is a big challenge. For example, all the students in schools are assigned to work on the same project, or even do a presentation in front of the class. Some of the students may feel that working in group is hard in the beginning, but because they have to do it, they will be fine. Students will then deals with their friends. Students will have the ability to increase their social net work. Others will get rid of their stress and shyness. As we can see working hard in school will help student to overcome some problems, and they will have better successful future.

Personally, working hard in school provides me with many benefits. When I was in school, I used to study hard. I was so hard for me to take the challenge to study a variety for subjects during one semester. I was struggling. I passed the school education step. But my study and working hard in school help me to prepare my self to run my own business. I become tolerable to any hard work. I can manage my time and my business.

In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I encouraged every one to work hard to have a better future. School would allow student to focus more on their education. Hard work in school will help students to overcome some problems they have. Consequently they will have better future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60448660586 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418981481481 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8637234955 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.5 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4375 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312858847336 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935302792775 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853854023569 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202126132774 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939328483464 0.0645574589148 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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