Being successful in our job helps us to be satisfied with ourselves and boost our self-esteem; therefore, today, in this competitive world people try different means and use various traits to be successful in their future job. Some students work and study very hard, and improve their resumes; on the other hand, others attend extracurricular activities to be more active and sociable during their studies. In my opinion, the ability to relate well to people is more important than only studying hard in school and being a nerd. I will discuss my convincing reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, when you have the ability to relate well to people around you, including your professors and classmates, you will be more successful in your studies, and as result in your job. By relating well to others, professors will pay more attention to you, you will be better in group work, and you will be respectable. Besides, this trait is a crucial part of successful people, so it is always a part of recommendation letters. Therefore, if you have this ability you will receive better recommendation letters for your future job. There was a TV show named Young Sheldon, and the main character was a nerd in his school who did not know how to treat others well. So, no one could resist him. Although he was the first rank in his school, his teachers hated him and in his carrier, no one could work with him either. Thus, the ability to relate to people well is significantly more important.
Second, if you even graduate with honors, but you do not know how to relate to people well, no one will accept you as a professional. People always refer to companies that have good customer service, the doctors who have good manners, and businessmen who are friendly. The more you relate well to people, the more customers you have, no matter if you were the first rank of your class or not. I know a doctor who is an expert in his job and he always saves lives; nevertheless, since he is always angry and busy, he faces patients with an awful manner. As a result, patients do not refer to him anymore. Hence, not only should you study enough, but also learn to relate people well.
In a nutshell, it is important to study hard for your future job to be successful. However, if you want to be the best in your career, you should learn to relate to people well, and its role is more crucial than studying hard.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62237762238 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57466356541 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470862470862 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5928106042 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.15 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385594733755 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133550965357 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135525908489 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280000181982 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974319065862 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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