For sucess in school and work the ability to adapt or adjust to a changing condition or circumstance is more important than have in excellent knowledge of a job or a field of study Do you agree or disageee

Beyond a shadow of a doubt, apparently, to be a successful is the dream of every individual, however, it is difficult to achieve due to increasing competition at schools as well as at workplaces. On that ground, there is a heated discussion on which one is the useful approach to be successful during school and work: to be flexible and rapidly adjust the surroundings or to be brilliant and gain comprehensive knowledge for the work. In this regard, a plethora of people possess the conviction that the latter view is more beneficial, while I look at this concept through a different lens and contend the former one as a better choice.

The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that even though having excellent knowledge, it is not beneficial to individuals until they do not know how to utilize it at the correct place. To be more specific, during the work and study, everything seems to change in a split second, therefore, using a correct method and suitable technology for various problems at the exact movement is the sole key to success. To exemplify, a friend of mine, Ravi, took a protecting measure when we were in danger while doing a chemistry experiment. She patented protecting equipment in order to prevent us from uncertain and harmful chemical reactions in the laboratories. Ultimately, her spectacular move won her an award. Indeed, it is judicious to say that despite being an average student, her presence of mind renders her to achieve a new innovation in the field of science.

Another noteworthy point striking in my mind is that easy adjustment when encountering a new situation aids people to make a good relationship at work or at the school realm. In the other words, people have to meet different personalities when they are working. Apparently, building a good relationship and being a flexible personality can assist human beings to maintain a better interpersonal relationship, which is vital to get a promotion within a department. To shed more light on this, a data statistic collected from an empirical study that is conducted at the University of California indicates that being soft and humble and making a warm relationship at the workplace enhances workers’ opportunities to get promoted as senior leaders. This is because it has been proven that people certainly like a leader who can make a kind relationship with their juniors. Ultimately, this enforces me to believe that success could be achieved through an adaptation of various situations at the required time.

To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I utterly believe that the foundation of success is the theory of knowledge, but the path to get success is paved by adapting and adjusting to different events.

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Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... a shadow of a doubt, apparently, to be a successful is the dream of every individual, howev...
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Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...esence of mind renders her to achieve a new innovation in the field of science. Another not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, as well as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03862660944 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05591153268 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557939914163 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6536860448 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.75 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.125 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127902816211 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386213419544 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354652704526 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077231823139 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177801809321 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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