Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. Reducing Costs First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another. Preventing Errors Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error. Aiding Research Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The points made in the lecture debunks the notions that adopting electronic medical record systems have benefits of reducing cost, preventing errors, and aiding researches. Each of these benefits suggested by the reading is discussed and scrutinized in the lecture, showing that electronic medical record systems may actually be much less promising compared to the picture drawn in the passage.
To begin with, the lecturer indicated that using the electronic system does not actually reduce costs. She supported this viewpoint by showing that doctors using electronic systems still keeps paper copies of records as backups and for legal purposes. Therefore, the costs of maintaining and managing these medical records remains virtually the same when using the electronic system. This contradicts the statement in the passage that suggests that using electronic medical record systems can reduce costs.
Furthermore, the lecture indicates that using electronic medical record systems does not help avoid errors caused by poor handwriting by doctors. In fact, doctors still write on paper when in examinations. Their handwriting on these pieces of paper were later transcribed by office staff, who will have a hard time recognizing what the doctor wrote if the doctor's handwriting was "artistic." Therefore, adopting the electronic system does not help prevent this kind of error, as the passage claims.
Finally, concerning the ability of such electronic medical record system to aid research, the lecturer doubted how much help it can provide. She holds this opinion because there are strict privacy laws that may potentially hinder the access and use of these electronic data. Many permission are needed before a researcher could access these medical records, and this often include the consent of individual patients. So, at the end of the day, these electronic records will not be of much help if the patients declined the researchers' access.
The lecture doubts the benefits of using electronic medical record systems recorded in the passage. The lecturer provided details and reasons demonstrating that these systems does not reduce costs, cannot avoid errors, and hardly aid research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun permission seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much permission', 'a good deal of permission'.
Suggestion: Much permission; A good deal of permission
...ccess and use of these electronic data. Many permission are needed before a researcher could ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, furthermore, if, may, so, still, therefore, in fact, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55029585799 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74373791673 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508875739645 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0578291174 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.066666667 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12312261275 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558754823811 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487947332126 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855501206636 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478315107622 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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