The time that young adults decide to be independent is controversial between people. Some adults prefer to leave their homes as fast as possible, while others like being with their family longer. To answer the question of which one is better, I think living with parents for more time is pleasant. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The young people who live with their parents experience less financial pressures. To be more specific, when children live in parent's houses, their cost of living decreases because a part of their expenses such as the cost of food, renting a home, and electricity is provided by their family. Maybe my personal experience sheds more light on this matter. Ten years ago, my brother decided to live with his friends independently. I remember that he worked till night to earn money for the living costs, and he was in a terrible situation because he asked me to help him by lending some money. On the opposite side, I lived with my parents, and I did not have any monetary troubles. As a result, live with family can degrade the costs.
Parents control their adults directly when their children are at home. Adulthood is a sensitive age for anyone because the children are tempted easily by harmful things like drugs. When adults live with family, parents can follow their children's behavior and friends to prevent them from hazards. For instance, my friend decided to leave home three years ago. He made friends with who had addicted to weed, and I anticipated that they influenced my friend. Two weeks ago, I saw him near a bridge smoking, and he was in bad condition. I believe that if he had remained at home, he would have not been an addict now.
In conclusion, being at home near the family for a more extended time is preferable with all this taken into account. The financial problems are less in the parent's house because they provide the costs. In addition, parents can pursue their children in order to prevent them from dangerous situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76724137931 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48110011389 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9385971685 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295220601198 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933010665096 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860989850283 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211241154711 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103363717032 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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