TPO 31 Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to s

It is critically important that people have an enjoyable life at all times. By comparing the quality of people's lives in the past and current time, it is determined that people were happier. Someones believe that the world's alteration causes this unsatisfied, while others think in different ways. I state that human is not contented with their lives, because of fluctuating world. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, associated with the unstable world, the jobs change rapidly, which means some businesses disappear, and some of them arise. As a result, people may lose their jobs if they do not adapt to rapid changes. These continuous adjustments can make people stressed and influence their satisfaction with life. The impressive statistics, revealed by recent social research conducted in our city, show that three thousand workers were employed in the oil factory ten years ago. However, now there are just five hundred persons since the advent of robots. It is evident that people who fired felt less pleasant, and they were shocked by the abrupt changes.
Furthermore, education alters significantly since the appearance of the internet and eBooks, which means students should adapt to the new form of studying. According to this, students should forget not only traditional books but also teachers. For example, after widespread COVID-19 propagation, children could not go to schools, so they should study at home. The shape of their education absolutely modifies. Students were sad about this happen and felt less joyful because they missed their friends, teachers, and classes. Moreover, the governments decide to pursue this education method in the future to reduce their costs, such as teachers' salaries, the book's price, and the school's building. Although these changes benefit governments, students do not feel pleased than in the past time do.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, our ancestors are more glade than us because their world did not change as soon as now. The occupations alter rapidly, and people may lose their jobs. Education changes, so the students should conform to those differences, which is unpleasant for them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...were happier. Someones believe that the worlds alteration causes this unsatisfied, whi...
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...ows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint. To begin with, associated with the unsta...
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...ey were shocked by the abrupt changes. Furthermore, education alters significan...
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
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...tudents do not feel pleased than in the past time do. In conclusion, with all this ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26495726496 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63139924344 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62962962963 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9135221428 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254631263898 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692216196553 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583500759552 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162272639732 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502202743494 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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