TPO 45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about existing of bees on Earth as early as ‎‎200 million years ago. The author of the article provides three views of the ‎skeptics doubting that the bees did not exist 200 million years ago. The lecturer ‎disputes the claims made in the passage. Her position is that the theories are not ‎convincing.‎

According to the reading, there are no fossil remnants of actual bees in ‎the fossilized structures for 200 million years ago. This specific argument ‎is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that for fossilizing the bees, ‎some sticky substance should exist. This sticky substance is produced by ‎a particular tree that was rare 200 million years ago. As a result, the ‎bees might exist 200 million years ago, but the substance fossilizing ‎them was not available.‎

Secondly, the author suggests that flowering plants were absent 200 ‎million years ago, which are the main source of bees’ food. The ‎professor, however, asserts that bees fed on non-flowering plants 200 ‎million years ago, such as pine trees. By emerging flowering plants, bees ‎adapted to feed on them. ‎

Finally, the writer posits that the nest chambers found in Arizona lack some of the ‎finer details of modern bees' nests. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is that ‎chemical experiences show that the 200 million-year chambers have a water-‎proof substance as the modern chambers have.‎

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Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 230 250
No. of Characters: 1122 1200
No. of Different Words: 118 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.894 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.878 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.471 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4