Parents play a significant role in children’s life; by exploring in everybody’s moments from birth till death, signs of their parents could be seen. Someones choose their parent’s jobs, on the other hand, others opt for a different career. Since I was considered to pick up one option, I prefer children to follow their parents and continue their parent’s route. Children have an available job by their parent’s efforts and their parent’s experiences can bring them more success. In what follows, I will explain the reasons with details.
First of all, children can have a job as far as they want. If parents do not have any open positions in their territory, they will make one for their children since they do not prefer that their children work for another person while they have their own business. For instance, one of my friends, whose name is Sara, decided to study architecture at university because of her father’s career. Her father buys some old buildings and reconstructing them so he can sell them again more expensive. In fact, after graduation, Sara can get the job of architecture who works for her father and she will not have any challenges to get a new job.
Second, parents have worth-while experiences in their jobs thus they can transfer them to the next generation. When children enter their parent's careers, they could get valuable experiences from their parents; By mixing them with contemporary knowledge, children can improve their ancestor’s career. For instance, Mr. Karimi has a large ice-cream factory in my country. His father started to sell ice-cream fifty years ago; after ten years, he decided to produce his ice-cream. He succeeded thus he could buy a small factory. Mr. Karimi helped his father to accelerate their career by new designs of ice-cream containers. Now they have an important role in ice-cream marketing in my country. It should be mention that if someone does not have any talent and ability in her or his parent’s jobs, he or she is annoyed and that can suffer them.
To sum up, there are some advantages that children pursue their parent’s jobs. They have provided jobs in their parent’s organizations and they can start their education closed to their family background. Another advantage is that parents have experience in their careers and by using this valuable gift, children can track the family’s route proudly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in fact, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05037783375 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72114459526 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518891687657 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.640182059 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4761904762 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311872573567 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10741825399 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859558329335 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234594542031 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077499649264 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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