In a team, who do not accept others' criticism cannot succeed
We are living in a sophisticated age which team-work have a profound impact on individual's performance. People are always trying to make their lives more comfortable, exciting and successful. Some people believe that those who accept others' criticism will be successful, while others are convinced those people can not be prosperous. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, i strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, if people do not accept other’s criticism, they can not collaborate with each other’s. AS a matter of fact, cooperation is the most features which guarantee success of all members of a team. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous prosperous group which their member accept others' opinion and talk about all aspect of each comments. Seldom is one able to be successful, if he/she can not endure other's opinion. Although some people may say incorrect things and their comments be false, what results from discussing is to investigate all aspect of each condition. For example, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that approximately 90 percent of people who are successful, are one who try to find their mistake and weakness according to others criticism.
The second reason why i agree with it is that, undoubtedly, the people who do not accept other's view may give rise conflict among members and eventually lead the group to collapse. Most people are not complete in their behavior and personality and others comments can enhance their abilities and find their problems. The modern world offers abundant example of the older people are more successful than the younger one. Because their accept others' view and purify themselves overtime. So important is accepting other's view that there is a great consensus among psychologist on this issue the people making themselves better in personality are one who accept other's view. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known Proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this" the more you do not care about others' view, the more they face problems".
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of accepting criticism of others on people's lives. Not only are they able to become successful in the future, but also it guarantees the success of team. For this reason, i highly recommended that people always think about others' view and shape their personality better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ich team-work have a profound impact on individuals performance. People are always trying t...
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Message: The adverb 'Seldom' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: Is Seldom
...talk about all aspect of each comments. Seldom is one able to be successful, if he/she ca...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...thers criticism. The second reason why i agree with it is that, undoubtedly, the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ew that there is a great consensus among psychologist on this issue the people ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, in addition, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18333333333 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80970439291 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511904761905 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.659265556 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.85 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278128697356 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880439677661 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816538339407 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178336880136 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426472220574 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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