Television has had a mostly positive effect on society.

It is a highly debated issue whether or not, Television has had more positive effect on our society, and this topic can be approached from many angles due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating over this issue, I believe that Television has had more negative effect on our society, and following discussion reveals my stands and reasoning.

I do believe that Television negative affect are outweigh its positive and these are my justification. To begin with, one of the most important points is the unfavorable effect of the advertisement on our children. last week I read an article on newspaper about a study on how the advertisement adversely effect on children, the study states that an average American high school graduate spend about 15000 hours watching television, which is far most than the time spend learning in schools. Televisions are teachers without no weekends, no summer break and our children brains are much like sponge absorbing whatever they've been taught. Most of the advertisement on Television is about junk food which leads to overweight in children. However, some might argue that Television help us stay connected via news both globally and locally, I contend that Television could lead to more distraction to our society.

The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that we all are aware of how television changed our society. Translated series from other countries has had a very obvious effect on our youth. take my niece as an example, she is a 14 years old how lies in Iraq, both parents busy meeting their family needs, so she spends a lot of hours watching Turkish series translated to Arabic. Her mother notice that her daughter is showing a sudden interest in make-up, asking question about why one of the character is cheating on her husband. This clearly illustrate the impact of watching television without supervision. However some people might argue that there are a lot of learning programs on television, I think the misleading programs are more.

By taking all above-mentioned argument into consideration, the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue, Television could cause a lot of distraction for young children. Parents should take their lead to supervise what their children are watching to minimize this affect.

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Television negative affect are outweigh its positive
Television negative effects outweigh its positives

advertisement adversely effect on children
advertisement adversely affects on children

an average American high school graduate spend about 15000 hours watching television
an average American high school graduate spends about 15000 hours watching television

which is far most than the time spend learning in schools.
which is far most than the time spending learning in schools.

Television help us stay connected
Television helps us stay connected

could lead to more distraction to our society.
could lead to more distractions to our society.

Her mother notice that
Her mother notices that

This clearly illustrate the impact
This clearly illustrates the impact

Television could cause a lot of distraction for young children. Parents should take their lead to supervise what their children are watching to minimize this affect.
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