Television, newspapers and magazines are too focused on the lives of famous people. Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Some people argue that media are too celebrity centric. However, I feel that the focus on celebrities is due to public demand and is more or less equal to the media's focus on other walks too. I shall explain my stance in two main points.
Firstly, newspapers have specific sections that include news from different areas such as business, politics, sports, entertainment etecetra. It is the top people from each field that make news and since they make news they are famous. Thus, it is obvious that famous people will be broadcasted in newspapers. Also, it is us that have given such people a status called "famous". Holding the media responsible for the status given by us is preposterous and in a way double standard.
Moreover, it is the people who come on television and become famous, not the other way round. For example, a news channel talking about the owner of a new start up may not be big news at first. However, if that startup becomes a hit amongst the crowd and then if a news channel broadcasts an interview with its owner, the same news will now be huge. This happens because more number of people become interested in knowing how that owner made it big. Initially, no one paid heed to what the owner was talking about. Thus, it is the deeds of the a person that make him famous and it is us public who wants to know more about that person thereby giving the media an insight to gather mpre information about his life.
Finally, the situation of whether or not the media is too focused on lives of famous people is complex. Some people may still feel that so much status is unnecessary. Nevertheless I feel that the media is also a money making industry and news is what we as people are intersted in and therefore if it is famous people, so be it.
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Suggestion: Nevertheless,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, such as, talking about, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54347826087 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53943284716 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534161490683 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7196508506 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0588235294 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64705882353 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168690122862 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602191118485 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608932637238 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108385938965 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338314650352 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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