Today there is a high competetion between people to get a suitable job Therefore whether people should take any work when there is chance to get it or it should be wait to get more satisfying one Every one has a different point of view Admittedly some pre | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Today, there is a high competetion between people to get a suitable job. Therefore, whether, people should take any work when there is chance to get it, or it should be wait to get more satisfying one. Every one has a different point of view.
Admittedly, some prefer to wait till find a perfect job. But, in my perspective, I would like to get a secure career. I will explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
First of all, getting job immediately when there is an opportunity to that is a crucial factor to get a perfect one in the future. This is because, trying to work will give us a lot of experience and skills. With the time, when we apply to dream career, there is a high chance to be accepted, this is due to the experiences that we get from previous one. For example, when I moved to United state before a couple of years. No one accepted to hire me as a dental assistant, which is my career in backgroud. Therefore, I tried to find other job. I was working as teacher substitute for one year. At the end, I can find my favorit career. As we can see the importance of taking a career when there is a chance for that.
In addition, taking a job when we find it help us to get money instead of waiting for what we want. we can start working and searching for other job in the same time until we get our admire. In this case, we can get money and broad of our horizon simultaniously. For instance, when I was working as a teacher substitute, My college has sister who work in dental clinic. She asked her to help me to find job. , As soon as possible, she can get a position for me in the same field. I appreciate to my previous job to give me a chance to get my favorat career. If I stay at home waiting, I can not find any thing.
In conclusion, It is very important to start work when there is opportunity to get it. This give will widen your scope. Furthermore increase your social net which might help in finding our deserve.

Today, there is a high competetion between people to get a suitable job. Therefore, whether, people should take any work when there is chance to get it, or it should be wait to get more satisfying one. Every one has a different point of view.
Admttidly, some prefer to wait till find a perfect job. But, in my perspective, I would like to get a secure career. I will explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
First of all, getting job immediatly when there is an opportunity to that is a crucial factor to get a perfect one in the future. This is because, trying to work will give us a lot of experience and skills. With the time, when we apply to dream career, there is a high chance to be accepted, this is due to the experiences that we get from previous one. For example, when I moved to United state before a couple of years. No one accepted to hire me as a dental assistant, which is my career in backgroud. Therefore, I tried to find other job. I was working as teacher substitute for one year. At the end, I can find my favorit career. As we can see the importance of taking a career when there is a chance for that.
In addition, taking a job when we find it help us to get money instead of waiting for what we want. we can start working and searching for other job in the same time until we get our admire. In this case, we can get money and broad of our horizon simultaniously. For instance, when I was working as a teacher substitute, My college has sister who work in dental clinic. She asked her to help me to find job. , As soon as possible, she can get a position for me in the same field. I appreciate to my previous job to give me a chance to get my favorate career. If I stay at home waiting, I can not find any thing.
In conclusion, It is very important to start work when there is opportunity to get it. This give will widen your scope. Furthermore increase your social net which might help in finding our deserve.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'waited'?
Suggestion: waited
...re is chance to get it, or it should be wait to get more satisfying one. Every one h...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ery one has a different point of view. Admttidly, some prefer to wait till find...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...areer when there is a chance for that. In addition, taking a job when we find i...
^^^^
Line 4, column 47, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... addition, taking a job when we find it help us to get money instead of waiting for...
^^^^
Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...job when we find it help us to get money instead of waiting for what we want. we ...
^^
Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...y instead of waiting for what we want. we can start working and searching for oth...
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Line 4, column 286, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rizon simultaniously. For instance, when I was working as a teacher substitute, M...
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Line 4, column 393, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...work in dental clinic. She asked her to help me to find job. , As soon as possible, she can get...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... She asked her to help me to find job. , As soon as possible, she can get a posi...
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Line 4, column 607, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... I stay at home waiting, I can not find any thing. In conclusion, It is very important ...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...et it. This give will widen your scope. Furthermore increase your social net which might he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.21066666667 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52701424306 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1540744866 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.7307692308 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4230769231 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26923076923 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42064853422 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121011683373 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144509068636 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297623739113 0.150856017488 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.292131596782 0.0645574589148 453% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 11.7677419355 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.55 10.9000537634 60% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments