TOEFL essay: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every place have the certain kinds of museums and most of the people always reach the museums when they travel to new places. Why people visit the museums? They express disparate opinions on this. From my perspective, we have the various reasons and some important reasons are as follows.

First, the museum are based on the local culture and traditions, when people visit in that place, then they easily know about the culture of local people. For instance, take the museum of Pokhara, in which the Gurung museum is totally based on the culture of the Gurung’s people and most of the tourist visit in that museum to know the culture of the Gurung’s people.

Second, not only the culture, to understand and know about the history is another reason of visiting. Many museums are set up according to the history of the nation. When people visit that, the museum provide the deep knowledge of the history of that nation. For example, from the data, the national museum of Kathmandu-capital city of Nepal, was visited that foreigner who were interested to know about the Nepal’s history. The components of that museum truly provided the information of the history of Nepal.

Third, we can get entertainment from the museum and our time can be passed easily when we enter into a museum. The recorded data and old artifacts certainly provides the entertainment. As a result, many people visit the museum only for entertainment. For instance, let take the example of Mountain museum in Pokhara, the mountain scenery was appealing drawing in that museum and the tool used by the climbers, also provided additional entertainment that every people do not forget to reach the museum when they arrived in Pokhara for visiting.

In conclusion, we have several reasons to enter the museum and in my opinion, the above reason are the most important reason to visit the museum.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, third, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99050632911 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66085426309 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439873417722 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3894464034 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5625 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415571730513 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165687601265 0.076458572812 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126982608555 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255102490731 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674172011522 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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