Hi Bruce, I am mahmoud and I am in the midst of preparation for TOEFL.
I hope you can grade my essay. Thanks!
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The society we live in represents an important part of our lives. The interaction with other people affects our behavior within a community whether we experience happiness or sorrows. Many people support the claim that friendships with few people during a long-term are crucial for happiness more than making a lot of friends easily; others would disagree. As far as I am concerned, I agree that maintaining friendships with a small range of people is much beneficial to our happiness than having numerous friends easily for two essential reasons.
First, the main reason is that it would create a strong relationship. Having few friends during a long period will definitely solidify the friendship and build up sort of a mutual understanding. This means that the other person (friend) understand deeply in a way that he or she can provide you the necessary happiness via numerous ways. For example, in my college days, I had only two close friends that I met in the dormitory. During the academic year, I experienced difficulties to digest some courses, so it did irritate me for a while. I didn't speak to anyone about this bothering matter, even my two closest friends, but as we spend years with each other we became very knowledgable of each other very well. My friends can easily assume what is bothering me by distinguishing the personal problems from the academic issues. Therefore, They tried to address my problem with delinquency according to the matter which was, in this case, providing me with extra tutoring hours regarding the courses that I had issues by the pretext of a group study and they alleviated all the ambiguity I had. As you can see, long-term friendships are important to establish happiness in our life.
Second, it would raise the level of trust between friends. When you have many friends, you cannot focus on each one of them and by consequence, you cannot have a strong trustworthy friendship. The latter would create serenity and happiness when you are surrounded by them. For instance, my uncle, a businessman who encounter a lot of people in his domain, the majority of whom he considered as close friends. One day my uncle had a business downfall, and he lost every penny because of some precipitate decisions he made during that time. Surprisingly for him, he never imagined that the myriad of friends that he had that time turned on him with such cruelty. Not only they did not offer any moral or physical help but some they stubbed him in the back since they were hatching a diabolical plan to take him down. This experience unveils how the happiness of a person comes with the friends you trust not with the huge number of friends you have your repertoire.
In sum, though some may oppose my reasoning. I genuinely believe that the small number of friendships the person have over a long period in life are much important for the well-being than having so many friends that you can acquire so easily. Not only will put the basis of a strong relationship but also it would build up a solid and trustful friendship. People should care more about implementing long-term friendships rather than getting new ones with ease.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is mo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 164, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'sort of'.
Suggestion: sort of
...ly solidify the friendship and build up sort of a mutual understanding. This means that t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 542, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...s, so it did irritate me for a while. I didnt speak to anyone about this bothering ma...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2961.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 614.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82247557003 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70210754053 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480456026059 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5446300684 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450542521957 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113260500499 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149055705386 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255682924253 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.258417790529 0.0645574589148 400% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.