TOEFL Independant
Nowadays, internet is vital part of our lives and therefore it should not be forbidden for new generations to use it, but it should be controlled in a way.
I believe that parents should allow their kids the use of cellphones, in order to keep in touch with family, friends, be informed and as an academic and research tool. Smart phones are part of our daily lives and will be for a long time, whether we want it or not. Internet, Google, social media, apps, etc. have changed they way we live and the way we work and study. Our mothers and fathers should be able to understand this transition and let youngsters make usage of this easy internet access. This tool can be a good way to comunicate with them when needed and in cases of emergency . It is also a good way to be informed about what happens in our communities, countries and in the world. Additionally, it is the best way to find information in an academic setting such as primary and secondary school.
Nevertheless, I think there are times and places more appropiate than others for the use of these gadgets. For example, kids should be forbidden to use their phones for chatting and navigating on the internet while having a family dinner. Since this moment is a time to disconnect to the web and connect with our loved ones, it is not a good time to enter Facebook. Another example is to give smartphones a bad usage when children are studying, like cheating on a exam or copy an essay. Parents should teach their little ones to be responsible with their actions regarding the devices. There should be a limit with the amount of time they spend plugged.
In conclusion, sooner or later, young children will be able to have access to the internet and own smart phones. So, the best way to educate future children to be responsible of this, is to do it earlier on.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...em when needed and in cases of emergency . It is also a good way to be informed ab...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...children are studying, like cheating on a exam or copy an essay. Parents should t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53313253012 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54989793069 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8546093869 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5294117647 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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