TOEFL Independent Essay - Do you agree or disagree with : Playing computer games is a waste of time. It should not be allowed for children.
In this modern age of electronics, computer games have no longer remained a novelty but rather have become a new normal for children. This is so because they have been exposed to the digital world right from a very young age through smart phones, tablets, TVs, etc. And I disagree that time spent on playing these games is wasted because of the reasons stated below.
Computer games are very different than other hobbies a child might have like reading a book or watching a movie. This is because it requires the child's brain to focus at the task in hand and complete it successfully. Children are usually dependent on their parents to help them to get out of a situation in which they are stuck. In computer games, the child has to complete several missions on his own to get to the next level. Thus they teach him to become more independent and self-reliable. Also solving missions and tackling all the problems in a game is a way to boost the child's confidence and self-esteem, which will definitely be visible in other areas of his life. Also computer games are designed in such a way that you are totally engrossed throughout the game. Studies have shown that a person playing a game regularly in a controlled time-span has more focus than before. Heightened focus and concentration will help children in excelling at other area like academics or sports. Online gaming gives you a chance to connect with anyone in the entire world. The other day, I saw my niece, who is just fifteen by the way, playing online chess with Vidhut Gujrathi, a well-known and prominent chess player of India from her home computer.
Also secondly, these games acts as an escape from all the academic work and other things that every child has to go through. They are a fun way to spend time at home especially when the child is restricted from going outside due to some reason. Some online games provide an option to play with friends just by sitting at home. This is very refreshing when say, people are all stuck at homes due to the current ongoing Covid pandemic. Playing these games are a sort of distraction for the children and also a means to get connected with their friends.
Thus to conclude playing computer games does not always mean that a child's time is being wasted. In fact, doing so in a controlled, limited manner will actually help to develop a child's mind, tackle problems, increased focus and also provide a chance to connect with anyone across the globe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, in fact, sort of, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67816091954 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45646571473 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524137931034 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1076703348 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9047619048 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252622241765 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791649295653 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668080581215 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15548865212 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189529104028 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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