Throughout the whole history collaboration and helping others has played a paramount (critical) role in improving the quality of live in a society. If citizens of a community do not help people in need, every problems which those needy people face, will affect the whole community. Due to this great importance, there is a heated debate about the ways to which help needy people. A growing segment of people believe this idea that helping a charity to give needy people money to start their small own business is the most favorable value for a society rather than provide food and housing or medical care. I, personally, concur with this idea. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
One imperative reason coming to mind at first is that starting a new business lead to the development of community. Needless to say that improving the financial condition of a society is dependent on development of business condition. A person who embarks his small business will gradually progress and improve his/her business and therefore, he could employ other unemployed people. Moreover, by improving his business he would pay more tax. Thus, creating job position in a society would lead to the improvement of that society.
Additionally, although there might be some counterexamples for this claim, however, human beings tend to laziness when his early needs such as food, housing or medical care are met. Providing basic needs will give them a feeling that they do not need to work anymore. Thus, they become dependent people who cannot stand on their own feet. In this regard, a saying comes to mind, the equivalent of which in English might be like this, “give a man a fish, and you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, and you feed him for a lifetime.” This quote help to depict the importance of investing for creating a new business than providing food or other basic needs for needy people.
Finally, our self-esteem and happiness is highly dependent on having a decent job. Statistics show the fact that individuals who have a job are happier in their lives than those who are unemployed. Working will cause the release of a great amount of dopamine in people’s minds. Dopamine is an especial hormone which is responsible for creating the sense of satisfaction and happiness in mind. Therefore, by providing the job the sense of happiness will enhance.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the goal of donation to charity should be creating business for needy people. Indeed, aside from its advantage for developing a community, not only do this action create the independence in poor people, but also create the sense of satisfaction and happiness in them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95717344754 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78002389319 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52034261242 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1779401206 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.652173913 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162176445295 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418272090765 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408338735078 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770723063967 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542500218479 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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