TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Though sports and social activites play a great role improving students interpersonal skills, students come to universities to gain knowledge in their academic subjects. Therfore I disagree with the statement that equal finances should be given to sports in comparision with finances given to education. My points to why I disagree to the above statement follows in next paragraphs.

The first reason why students come to colleges is for studying where as sports or social activities are provided to them to support them, improving their physical fitness or interpersonal skills. Providing equal finances to sports and social activities in comparision with finances to that of classes and libraries potrays that universities and colleges are not giving high importence to studies. In my opinion extra curricular activities can be given equal importence but not equal financial support. For an example a student comes to college that provides him education in his field of interests like science, mathematics, engilsh or arts etc. Universities should spend their finances towards providing good staff, more number of library books etc so that student can have goo education from the univerity. Instead if the college provides equal finances to other facilities, finances needed to improve educational standards reduces.

Another reason why i disagree with the statement is that students doesnot give importance to studies if colleges itself doesnot give high importance to education. For an example if we give less importance to our cultures at home , then our children too will follow us giving less respect to our cultures and furthur one day we cannot blame them for not following our traditions as we itself doesn't follow them. Similarly if university management itself doesn't give high importance to education students will be diverted from their goals in education.

Lastly , if student wants to improve his skills in sports or social activites and take up a career in those fields, there will be schools that give exclusive education in those skills. In such scholls highest priority will be given to sports or extra curricular activites than that in acadimic subjects. We see some retired sportsmen like Sachin, Pullel Gopichand open their sports acadmies for students who want to choose sports as their careers.

To sum up, universities and colleges that provide acedemic education should concentrate more on providing good education to children and spend good amount of finances towards education.This doenot mean to neglect sports or other extra curricular activites but to give education first priority.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...udents come to colleges is for studying where as sports or social activities are provid...
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...ome to colleges is for studying where as sports or social activities are provided...
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... have goo education from the univerity. Instead if the college provides equal finances ...
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... less importance to our cultures at home , then our children too will follow us gi...
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...t following our traditions as we itself doesnt follow them. Similarly if university ma...
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...rom their goals in education. Lastly , if student wants to improve his skills ...
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...sive education in those skills. In such scholls highest priority will be given to sports or ext...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, similarly, so, then, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41809290954 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80677156595 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474327628362 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.0152847128 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5625 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199618547903 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798151946426 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605355179814 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114208367778 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059720564467 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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