TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Sports and social activities are necessary to relax while engaging in university life, but at the same time these are the least expected features of college activity from students because of the pressure the have while choosing a career, a university, a fraternity, etc., many don't ever come across the opportunity to expect to have a social life. My own experience says a lot regarding the previous, i was so committed in searching for the best education that i never gave a thought on what will i do with my free time if i had any, the result was that i got a nervous breakdown.

Stress is a partner in daily college and university life, we cannot relieve it with constant studying as i usually thought during my career. My mother always told me "healthy minds achieve better in life", so i started looking for some extracurricular activities around my campus and found out there are not many. For example, our campus only provided soccer, basketball and volleyball to choose from for female students, which was very disappointing because i prefer water sports better and had no extra time in my schedule to look for gyms outside the campus. Some colleges and universities have these kind of problems due to hard financial problems, unfortunate administration or even lack of interest from students.

Fortunately, scientists have researched further through students lack of interest in sports and in social activities, which unfortunately is increasing every year, and most of them have concluded pretty much the same, which is that students are using technology over social activities and misunderstand the usual need of activities, this is why many universities have financed much more in classes and libraries than in fomenting sports and healthy social activities. The education system is needing a restructuring, and soon.

Although, colleges have come across the previous, the Educations Boards of Universities have been searching for new methods to increase students anticipation for social activities through out their time in the campus, this has come hand in hand with new investment projects that are much needed in various colleges. Some, drastically, have implement official sports classes that students are forced to complete through their career, other have used informative resources to help students get interested in various new activities such as water polo, aerobics and even dance classes.

Furthermore, today some most universities can proudly say that sports and social activities are very much linked in their different campus, students get through their shut out lives and socialize while exercising, make new friends and indirectly help themselves to study better while keeping a healthy body and mind.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, while, for example, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28538812785 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91816638386 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541095890411 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.796793831 48.9658058833 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 210.454545455 100.406767564 210% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 39.8181818182 20.6045352989 193% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128579640413 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505220312646 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327360869998 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797379162472 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186957802264 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.4 11.7677419355 199% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.43 58.1214874552 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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