Universities are known as a place to improve students’ acknowledge in various aspects and prepare them to enter society in order to find their passionate job. Besides, sports and social activities role as an inseparable part of individuals especially the young ones attending universities. As students get busier dealing with their courses, It gets harder to save time for their mental and physical health. We should remind that adequate physical condition can also boost mental health and stability which is needed these days, especially for students who are probably under a lot of pressure. To elaborate on my perspective, I believe universities should consider social activities as much as academic departments.
Universities and colleges can be determinants for students' social life and can evaluate their social networking and team working skills. This can be mentioned as another reason to support my viewpoint. While students are enhancing their knowledge through studying, they can be exposed to soft skills like communication by joining college sports teams and learning contact with others, and improving their relations with their teammates which could be beneficial for future of students working life. University campuses usually have some related teams where students can join and cooperate with each other for a project or share their ideas on an issue. These collaborative activities push students to pair or small groups working to discuss problems and come up with solutions for their challenges. This way, students progress in both academic and communicative skills simultaneously.
To achieve such needs, a part of every university campus budget should be spent on sports and social activities facilities as much as classes and libraries. The money could be utilized to build sports gyms and supply equipment for students’ physical exercises. The more they care about the improvement of the facilities, the more students are encouraged to take part in activities. From my own experience, back at high school, there was a well-equipped gym that our school principal had arranged for us to use which was a true enjoyment for me and I was enthusiastic about heading up there and doing some workouts.
To conclude, contrary to the idea of many people assume that much attention should not be paid to social activities in universities, I presume non-academic activities are as important as academic ones and they should be considered major fields for students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...sionate job. Besides, sports and social activities role as an inseparable part of individu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38461538462 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96784875503 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574358974359 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1320162226 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.25 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14107530316 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530935231078 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423223471451 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943196883876 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00763535788286 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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