There is no shortage of debate about the financial investment of campus to activities between outclass activities and class activities. In my opinion, I prefer to allocate the financial support to sports or social activities equal class and libraries. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
One reason that, statement is the university have to build connection of students, which is building connection by team working and playing like football, table tennis and other activities. If the students join the activities that play together, they can easily to know each other. So, sport and social activities of university can make relationship of students. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in university in Bangkok, I join a lot of social activity in university then I can make relationships with friend who study in another field. Moreover, I can exchange my experience to my friend who I know with social activity. Now I have been close friend. Accordingly, I think this sport and social investment in the university make students an incredible life.
Another reason that, statement is the exercise and social activities improve mindset and emotion of students. When you have more stressed in class room, you want to release it out. So, the other activities in the university can reduce pressure freshly. For example, when I was in university in Bangkok, my friend who study in my field, Industrials Engineer, have problem about high pressure in the class room. So, him problem make him want to be alone and really bad. However, the university have social activities like CSR - Corporate social responsibility, which is help him to reduce high pressure with joining CSR activity. As the result, he is better than before and he can control him stressed forever.
In conclusion, I strongly believe the sport and social activities investment make high quality students from university. This is because building relationship and improving mindset and emotion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...I strongly believe the sport and social activities investment make high quality students f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16012084592 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89292764137 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483383685801 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3560404401 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.55 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195799068093 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658433146225 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586382497437 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129079493643 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467855941972 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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