TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Obviously, friendship is an important and inevitable part of our life. People tend to make friends and share their thoughts. They spend a considerable amount of their time with them every day. Some people would agree with the idea that keeping their old friends is more important than making new friends; others would disagree. Although advent of new modern technology makes it easy to keep our old friendship, I prefer to make new connections than to keep our old friends for two important reasons.
First, some radical changes in every phase of our life make people select new friendship. As people get older and older, It is more probable that their interests, thoughts changes. These changes would need some new friends whose thoughts and interests are the same as your current situations. For example, when I was high school, which was located in my hometown, I had some close friends. We spend most of our times on our commons like as hanging out with each other, going to the cinema, playing football and so on. It was worthwhile to cherish our friendship. Nevertheless, after we had finished high school, some of them found a job and started working and therefore started their family, the other migrated to another city where was far away, and about me, I decided to continue my studying. I accepted at a university in another city. These days I am studying my interest major with some new friends. As you can see, although we liked to keep our friendship, the world wants something different.
Second, it helps to be more successful in your life. For example, when I was in university, I had two friends who were completely different. One of them just have two friends all the time he was at the university, but the other one makes new friends with everyone easily. Although they live at the same place and the same major as well, the latter one was always more successful because he had many new friends. Whenever he had any problem in his project or homework, he just shares the problem with all of his friends, it was interest that one of his friends could help him with his problem. As you can see, if he had not made so many friends, he would not have solved his problem so rapidly.
To sum up, although most of people prefer to keep their old friends I definitely prefer to make new friendship. Not only do we have to make new friends, but we also would be more successful. Making new friends would help us new experiences.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As everyone know having some friends is an...
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Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: When
...ble amount of our time with our friends.When we go to school we have some friends to...
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Line 2, column 369, Rule ID: KNEW_NEW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'new'?
Suggestion: new
.... I had a lot of friends who could just knew English. But since I am so sociable. I ...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...e to help me. In my city, there was not any one who had conditions like me. I search th...
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Line 3, column 746, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o make deal with some computer company. Since I was working at some companies that ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, such as, in my view, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41716566866 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46425920228 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421157684631 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2442282527 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.2285714286 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3142857143 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254099045015 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724211382082 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920931332259 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189444857798 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577690036363 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 11.7677419355 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.57 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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