I agree with the statement that people nowadays are spending a lot of time doing personal enjoyment things and wasting time on unnecessary actions and avoid working a lot and having a healthier life. There are my reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, people don't care what about they see on social media, they only use their cell phones no matter what they need to do. It is very easy to see what people are doing in their lives because there is a big diversity of apps about what anyone is doing or planning as well. In addition, technology is very advanced in this days and internet became cheaper than the old times. I have a friend, Felipe, and he is very technophile and even though some apps are not user-friendly he can use very well this app. Some days ago we were in a meeting and we were talking about the items on the agenda and he was everytime looking his cellphone to know what his girlfriend was doing and he interrupted all the time the meeting talk with she on whatsapp. I asked him if the internet on his cell phone never end and he answered there was a lot of internet because of his cell company offered a new plan and his old plan was outdated and expensive. He did this exchange and now in this days, he uses a lot these apps.
Second, people in actuality are more worried about their health than people in the past. we are changing our vision about food, about good meetings and a good relationship with the others. I went to see a hamh2 months ago and I was a workaholic in this epoch and all my blood tax was in good and I needed to change my lifestyle. The first thing that I needed to spend more time with my family. I installed skype on my cell phone and met more with my friends became healthier. As a result, all my problems with blood are gone and I had a balanced life.
In conclusion doing this exchange, about spending time and money and could be a good or a bad thing. will depend on how and when they will use.
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...ney and could be a good or a bad thing. will depend on how and when they will use.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, talking about, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2654155496 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29272527979 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482573726542 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7316155088 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5882352941 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9411764706 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209635978052 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734390594825 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845443694402 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160684832573 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724193268955 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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