The importance of quality of life and the sense of subjective well-being has always been an interesting topic for human. Whether or not human life today is more comfortable than the past, it is generally accepted that it is being experienced a new and different period in twenty-one century after the advent of technology. In my opinion, nowadays it is possible for people to have a more enjoyable life than what their ancestors have been experienced.
First, modern technology like Internet has been have decisive effects on lifestyle of human while it is not possible in the past. In the 1990s, the emergence of the Internet at homes led to some new experiences which all known as positive changes. For instance, the bitter experience of dot-com bubble, an unprecedented economic situation in market and stock caused by the advent of internet in marketing, indicated that how it would be possible to have an economic boom via some internet-based protocols, which is not the case for the time of human's ancestors. Humans also find it significantly easier to help each other via modern equipment. For instance, Nicholas Negroponte, a prominent American CEO who is co-founder of MIT Lab, has established a non-profit startup named "One Laptop per Child" which its main purpose is to provide free laptop and the Internet for children below the poverty line in all of the world.
Second, economic prosperity is known as another characteristic of modern era that makes a more comfortable life for human. Nowadays industrial companies are profitable in trade more than every time in past and therefore unemployment rate has declined. Furthermore, people have often more satisfactory jobs because their occupation is closely reliant upon their expertise they learn in universities. These all result in a sense of subjective well-being in human mind and thus they feel comfortable. According to a recently published paper in Nature journal, the subjective well-being of people has a strong correlation with their economic status in job satisfactory which are more accessible in these days.
In conclusion, unlike some people, who may prefer a tradition life in the past and contend that was an easier life than today, it is my deep conviction that people these days can enjoy their life more than the past and that is due to the advent of technology and its opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...ys been an interesting topic for human. Whether or not human life today is more comfortable th...
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
... new and different period in twenty-one century after the advent of technology. In my o...
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...odern technology like Internet has been have decisive effects on lifestyle of human ...
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Line 3, column 916, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... for children below the poverty line in all of the world. Second, economic prosperity i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13110539846 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96643172137 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52442159383 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.4338866892 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.571428571 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104133786481 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398411545521 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412651628604 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811876243932 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045899491777 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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