Nowadays opposite of the past, most of the young people have a dream to being a specialist in their favorite filed they had studied and graduated on that, and most of them catch it. In my opinion, being an expert and having lots of extensive information’s about their graduation field, is really useful for all the people who are in touch with them. But some people believe that, if they are full of information’s, they would be more helpful for other. But I really disagree. So now I want to talk about the advantages and disadvantages it has.
First, I was born in IRAN, and in my country, we have the proverbial saying that, if the tree is full, its branches will fall below, it means that if the person how much knowledgeable he will be humble and his head down. On the other hand, when some people think that they knowing everything, most of the time talking in vain, and no one listened to them because all the people know it they do not have an expert on any subjects. For example, my brother is dentist and everywhere in family sermonizes he just answer the questions about his major and nothing more, but my father just had diploma of high school. He always shares his idea about all the topics in serious way and at first all people thinks he’s very professional but at the end nobody listens to him anymore, so all the family member has respect for my brother.
Second, it has some different meaning between of ‘’ she has a deep knowledge and she has a broad understanding’’ the first one is, she is very professional on her major but the second means she comprehended about somethings that shouldn’t be her major. for example, my major in university was fashion and design and my job is interior house design, one night my boyfriend and I went to the huge luxury ceremony that one of our customers invited us, in the middle if the night, one of the guests has heart attacked and no one knows what should they do, immediately without any waste of the time I called to 911 and asked for helping, while everyone was in shocked I got the situation in my hand, I tried to keep the person calm, and helped him to lie down, but suddenly the person stops breathing, and the emergency told me; you should perform CPR on him right away, until the ambulance came. Fortunately, he backs when the emergency came but his not conscious but I had done it to saved that person’s life without any medicine knowledgeable.
In conclusion, whether our knowledge has been specialized or public information, we must be able to use it in the right way, that is in the interest of all, and we will never raise ourselves above all, because of our education, whatever science progress, there are still many issues that we do not have information about them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.640562249 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82354238047 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526104417671 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.077249367 48.9658058833 296% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.769230769 100.406767564 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.3076923077 20.6045352989 186% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0721313815963 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0232984841547 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02254164476 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0470359059397 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158635299498 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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