Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

In order to encourage children to get good mark at school, it is up to parents. And just each parent knows that what thing is special for their children but some parents don’t know so they pay money to them to decide what they like to buy with it. in my opinion, it’s a really better idea than parents buy something.

If I want to talk about reasons, I should say: first of all, Parental wearing dress idea has a lot difference with today's children and adolescents, so they couldn’t buy an exciting gift for them. For example, when I was 15-year-old, my parents buy pink T-shirt with plisse skirt that I really hate that, because in that time, I interested in black things like rock stars’ dresses and black nail polish but they think, these things are good for Prostitution jobs, they didn’t get it, maybe their culture had this source of problems, by the way after 5 years later they understand the best way is give me money.

Second, when children get good grade at school, while their parents encouraged them, they can understand how save their money and spend it in necessary conditions they really need it and when they are teenagers they’ll find some part time jobs to save more money and who knows, maybe they can rent house after they’re 18-year-old and live in own house independently. For example, I remember, when I was 21-year-old I buy my own small house with my partner by my own salary also in that time, beside of my job, I was study on university too. But life does not go as I want to go, my partner left me when I was 17 weeks pregnant, and I have to handle all the things in my life, like as going to university in early morning and after that went to work until midnight, So I can pay my renting home. That was the awful moments that I’ve ever had, but I didn’t need my parents financial helped, because my parents taught me how can I save my money for hard situations to never ask for help from anyone else.

Third, parents have a duty to encourage their children to be great at schools with studding hard to achieve their future dreams, but it’s not everything in their life’s, the world does not end if one does not want to go to college or school physics score is rejected. They shouldn’t push hard them they just show the best way but that’s their life so the children must decide about it. one of my friend in high school, was Japanese, her dad always punishment her because of her low scores very badly after some month’s police found her corpse in warehouse of our school she got suicide because of that annoying violently.

In conclusion, I’m agree to get money as reward to our children, it has many advantages, but we as a perfect parent should take care of them to, push violently never worked just get every things worth. Children must rely on their parents as secure support.

Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ey are teenagers they'll find some part time jobs to save more money and who knows, ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, third, while, for example, in conclusion, by the way, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60038610039 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53670671636 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507722007722 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.483238315 48.9658058833 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.214285714 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.0 20.6045352989 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309382966704 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124639212995 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738123009548 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199750281898 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599929031297 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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