tpo-50

Essay topics

In this set of materials, the reading passage mainly discusses about a scientists plan for sending humans to Mars in the future which has some challenging problems about storing humans essential needs,Difficuties can be appearanced for people in the zero-gravity and The Suns radiation which is really harmful for humans, While in the listening passage the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text. First of all, in the reading passage, it is clearly stated that travel to Mars can take two years that is so long and storing food, water, and oxygen for astronauts is more thanthe ships capacity. However, the professor believes this is not convincing. She claims that there is special method which can be used for space travelling, in this way astronauts use water instead of soil for cultivation that is really useful for them because it needs smaller space than ordinary way ,it is appropriate about water recycling, and it can release oxygen that is necessary for astronauts breathing. In addition, the professor disagrees with this idea that being for a long time in space with zero-gravity can harm astronauts muscles and bones. She points out that they can maintain their muscles mass and bones density or at least slow down this process with some particular exercises and eating mineral supplements. Finally,although in the text it is mentioned that spaces radiation could be very dangerous for astronauts and protecting all the ship from radiation could be impossible because it increases the ships weigh so much, the professor subscribes to the view that scientists could build a small shelter for special times that they have radiation attacks because this case is occasionally and they are not faced with it all the time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Difficuties
...ems about storing humans essential needs,Difficuties can be appearanced for people in the ze...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 891, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...it needs smaller space than ordinary way ,it is appropriate about water recycling,...
^^
Line 1, column 1258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nsity or at least slow down this process with some particular exercises and eatin...
^^
Line 1, column 1330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , although
... and eating mineral supplements. Finally,although in the text it is mentioned that spaces...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, really, so, while, at least, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 288.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06597222222 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78746358209 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545138888889 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 21.2450331126 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.211642329 49.2860985944 268% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 208.428571429 110.228320801 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.1428571429 21.698381199 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06452816374 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.3589403974 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 53.8541721854 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.0289183223 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.7273730684 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.498013245 175% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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