Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

School grades are the most important measurements for assessing the students' performance at school. So the students should be encouraged to study their lessons well to get a high score. This often brings up a controversial question: How can parents exhort their children to study more? In my point of view, parents can reward their children by giving them money. This will kill two birds with one stone: Children can learn the value of both education and money. What follows is an elaboration of my viewpoint.

Children learn that education is very important for their future development through the process of getting rewards from their parents for their better school results. That is to say, when parents give their children money, they encourage their children to study more. Consequently, the children gradually get accustomed to studying, and finally learn the value of education when they become older. For example, when I was 7 years old, my father paid me some money for my full score in my report card. The next years, I tried harder to get more money and I gradually become interested in studying my lessons and gaining knowledge. And that is how I got a hint from money, found out how important the education is in the future life and in facing better job opportunities, and continued my education.

Earning and spending money is a very difficult task nowadays that should be learned in childhood. This can happen through offering money by parents to their children for their school grades. In fact, children learn to spend the money that they have earned through hard work for a good result in school. This is similar to a career situation that children will face when they become adults. For instance, my friend used to write her expenses and the money that her parents gave her when she was at high school. She learned how to manage her money and had a huge saving when she finished her high school. Additionally, she is her own accountant right now and never has encountered financial problems due to her experience at high school.

Admittedly, payment of money for the best grades in school by parents poses some bad effects on children, including changing the children's priorities to money matters and making them to study the lessons superficially only to get a high score. Nonetheless, I believe that parents should reward their children's good results in school because new teaching and assessing methods can compensate the disadvantages of money rewards. Relevant statistics indicate that new methods have improved the way students study and made them to study the lessons practically and deeply.

Decisively, if one assess the aforementioned merits of offering money to children for their high grades, one soon realizes that it is worth to pay the money. In fact, rewarding children with money can result in better future life because children gradually become interested in education, continue their education and face better job opportunities. Furthermore, they learn to manage their income and expenses in the future by managing their money that they earned during childhood in school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...mportant measurements for assessing the students performance at school. So the students ...
^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'finally', 'furthermore', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'that is to say']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258865248227 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.163120567376 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0709219858156 0.0866891130778 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0390070921986 0.046263068375 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0886524822695 0.0685040099705 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109929078014 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0425531914894 0.0351676179071 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66355153704 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0354609929078 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00177304964539 0.00188951952338 94% => OK
Determiners: 0.0691489361702 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0195035460993 0.0209618222197 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0195035460993 0.0139019557991 140% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3127.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 516.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06007751938 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377906976744 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269379844961 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184108527132 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114341085271 0.112833075102 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66355153704 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43992248062 0.524397521467 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.5696225478 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.64 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.344416397 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.08 120.699889404 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.64 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.644075263715 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.5779844961 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.41463414634 1.45489161554 97% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306877367023 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144638151622 0.103427244359 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0974334905667 0.0752933317313 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488315290626 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.117232275426 0.151897553556 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127570031916 0.114077575197 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655010971237 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.38829167587 0.336927656856 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0428753384239 0.067059652881 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227082826572 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364638391056 0.0618886996521 59% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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