TPO 28- integrated writing - Peary's trip to the North Pole
The article provides three supporting arguments for Robert Peary's claim that he has reached the North Pole in 1909. The professor however states that there is no solid evidence for this claim, and the article's arguments are not convincing.
First, the passage claims that the National Geographic Society committe decared that Peray had reached the North Pole. The professor opposes this point by saying that it is true, but the committe was biased and not objective, so its conclusion cannot be trusted. She explains that Peary's close friends were in the committe, who have contributed money to it. Also, the investigations took only 2 days, and was not carefully conducted, according to Peary himself.
Second, the reading posits that a Tom Avery has recently traveled from coast of Greenland in 37 days, supporting Peary's claim about traveling that fast in same route. The professor contends with this point by saying that Avery's traveling conditions was different to that of Peary. She explains that although the dogsled was similar, Avery took advantage of a favorable weather conditions and being light in weight, since he didn't packed food with himself.
Third, the author states that by measuring the shadows and sun position in Peary's photographs, it can be established that they were taken in the North Pole. The professor refutes this point by saying that no such accurate measurement can be done based on the photographs, because they are taken with a primitive camera 100 years ago, and therefore are fuzzy, faded and with blurred shadows.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: light
... favorable weather conditions and being light in weight, since he didnt packed food with himsel...
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Line 5, column 425, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ons and being light in weight, since he didnt packed food with himself. Third, the...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1309.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15354330709 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55994230533 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586614173228 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5623890759 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38859665902 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157554635514 0.0996497079465 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136878599204 0.0662205650399 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231950453155 0.162205337803 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079422580682 0.0443174109184 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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