Tpo 28- integrated writing

The reading and lecture are both about Robert Peary’s reaching to North Pole. The author of the reading feels that Peary reached the Pole and provide three arguments. The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. She is of the opinion that he did not actually reach the North Pole.
To begin with, the author argues that the National Geographic Society conducted a thorough investigation of Peary’s records and equipment. In the article, it is said that the committee concluded that Peary’s accounts were consistent and persuasive and declared that he had indeed reached the North Pole. This specific argument is challenged by lecturer. She claims that conducting was not completely objective. Committee members were close friends, and they contributed large money to this research. Additionally, she says that it investigation lasted two days, so it was biased and not trustworthy.
Secondly, the author suggests that a recent expedition provides support for Peary’s claim that he reached the North Pole in only 37 days after setting out from Ellesmere Island off the coast of Greenland. The article mentions that Tom Avery recently made the same trek in less than 37 days by using the same kind of dogsled, the same number, and breed of dogs as Peary had. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by mentioning it is unfair to compare between Avery and Peary. The food for Avery is supplied by an airplane rather than a dogsled. She elaborates on this by bringing up the point that there are highly favorable air conditions for Avery, but Peary faced frigid air conditions.

Finally, the author posits that here are photographs taken by Peary which support his claim to have reached the North Pole. Moreover, it is stated in the article that the Sun's position established from the photographs corresponds exactly to the Sun's position as it should have been at the North Pole on that day. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that photographs do not prove this claim. The technique scientists used depend on measuring shadow precisely, but we could not establish Sun’s position by this technique. Additionally, she says that camera which photographs used was very primitive, so photos look blured.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d the Pole and provide three arguments. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...air to compare between Avery and Peary. The food for Avery is supplied by an airpla...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, in contrast, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 363.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15977961433 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7701940204 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 145.348785872 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537190082645 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.83350303 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.65 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.604700352218 0.272083759551 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16778666228 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137474631541 0.0662205650399 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360247992564 0.162205337803 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452702992914 0.0443174109184 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 63.6247240618 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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