TPO 09 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weight pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to a truth. Some people believe that the downside of this advancement of technology is that children will be less creative compared to our ancestors. In my humble opinion, I definitely agree that with the birth modern day advancement creativity of our young generation will be at risk. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of individuals would agree to the notion that technology has become the modern era which means variety of products are invented to make our lives easier such as computer, cellphone, internet. In addition to this, children mostly used their personal laptop to create their homework, project, research paper which is more convenient and less time consuming. Furthermore, with the use of computer and Internet everything they need is within the click of a button. In other words, they will not strive enough or think harder to get the result done, so, they become less creative. For example, my friend Anna has an art project what she did was she just google the topic given and just printed the image she found on the internet and put it on a frame. The result of this, Anna failed on her project due to she didn't make an effort to excel on her art class. Technology makes individuals lazy and unimaginative which can be detrimental to the well being of the children.
Secondly, In the past there are no gadgets available for them to use. Folks that time tends to do their job without the help of technology. Researching for projects and knowing simple information is very difficult at their genre. Everything needs to be done manually, if you need to study the only option for them is with the help of textbooks. For instance, my mother Josie always tells us when she was on her elementary years, few resources are available on their school library and she has no choice but to utilize what they have. Mom has school project in Science and must do a life size volcano, she uses her knowledge and be creative enough to actually create a 3d version of Mayon Volcano, she put a frame of a cone in a middle of the plywood and adorned the cone with crampled pieces of newspaper, also, painted it green with highlight of red in the crater. All in all, people in the past are more creative because they have no choice but to use their brain in order to finish their task at hand.
In summation, yes, it's impossible to provide a complete satisfying answer to an open ended question. Although the jury may be out on this given essay topic, we can come to mutual agreement that technology has negative effects on their well being due to the reasons and details mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, after all, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67378640777 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52024323785 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533980582524 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3744655761 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.619047619 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5238095238 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161980988195 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474470126864 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356857980944 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090363537064 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236916683477 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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