TPO 13 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weight pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topics requires careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to a truth. Some people believe in today's generation extended family is less important compared in the past. In my humble opinion, I disagree that family ties is not vital in every person. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of individuals would agree to the notion that family is integral part of ones society. Hence, in every household accounts for a strong bond between family members. In addition, up to now here in the Philippines we still practice close family ties where every family member supports one another. I lived in a family where we lived at one community where my uncle and aunt close lives by. For instance, when I have problem in school or difficult situation in life I would come to my aunt for advice and moral support. I can easily contact her and drop by her house when I needed her. For me extended family would be always be important in my life because they are always for me no matter what happens. All in all, family would always makes me feel safe and secure in every moment of my life.
Secondly, having extended family by your side has negative aspect is that you will not be independent because you know someone will be there for you. For example, when I was in college I studied in Quezon City it is a 5 hours drive from my home to school, so, I decided to be in a dorm. I was living all by myself with no assistance from my relative. Moreover, I have a difficult time adjusting because everything I need my mom or my aunt does it for me such as washing my clothes, preparing my things for school. In other words, I become too much dependent on them and I neglected to be a mature person, everything changed with the way I see life. Long story short, I would not be independent person If I would still live with my extended family, I will not be aware of the things I am missing because I am well nurtured to the point that I did not explore the things around me.
In summation, yes, it's virtually impossible to provide complete satisfying answer to an open ended question. Although the jury may be out on this essay topic, we can come to a mutual agreement that family is integral part of community and there is always a helping hand when you needed it the most.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, after all, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, you know, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44086021505 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45864488581 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3041722884 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133620942878 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444190409226 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417419823191 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806876063862 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200976138224 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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