TPO 1: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that colleges should allocate their finance into libraries and classes since this would directly lead to professional advancements. However, I subscribe to the view that sports and social activities are equally important.
First, sports will help students retain their physical and mental health. For most of the students studying is a sedentary job, they sit on their desks for several hours, doing their assignments, and spent additional several hours sitting in the classrooms listening to the lectures. As a result, they have not only become unfit and coordinated, but they also suffer from different mental conditions such as depression and anxiety. Physical exercises will undoubtedly help students remain fit. It is also perfectly known that doing physical exercises lowers blood pressure, and hence, decrease the possibility of heart conditions. Moreover, sports can help students ventilate their anger and soothe their nerves, and thus, have a healthier mental life.
Second, social activities can introduce new subjects to students. Socializing with their peers, students can learn about new topics and as a result, they can broaden their thought limits. For example, I learned that I was interested in neuroscience_ the major I am going to study for my PHD_ when attending a weekly student meeting at university, while I was a physics student.
To sum up, I totally believe that students benefit from involving in sports and social activities as much as they benefit from attending classes at the university because they can retain their physical and mental health, and learn about new topics.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 255.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40784313725 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71438278337 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.481314511 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.916666667 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102733762781 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458800644557 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441343780751 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830344917839 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436132292564 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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