Playing games are considered an instrument of sound mental and physical health. The trend of indoor games such as video games are proliferating and gaining fame among all age groups – from adolescents to adults. However, the impact of this trend has come under scrutiny and has been a concern for many. The protagonists of such games cite that video games are an effective educational tool, whereas dissenters void that claim by counting numerous demerits of such games. I completely agree that video games are having negative repercussions. Some of the disadvantages will be outlined in following paragraphs
To begin with, videos games has liked been to many problems in the schools especially, studies consistently have shown that children who play video games have problems with attendance as well as management defect as sleeping in the class, and exhibition of disruptive and even hostile behaviors. The children who are affected with a long exposure to action games have a negative impact on their brain function, and they are likely to imitate these behaviors with their children at schools. For example, my son Steven has 6 years old; he used to sit in the front of computer more than 5 hours playing video game such as action games, as the result, he became so aggressive with us, even with his friends at school, and the teachers complain about his behavior. So, I worked on that and let him play the games which help in growing his intelligence such as education games, or games that help to learn valuable things such as soccer-ball games since it helps him to learn how to be cooperative. I let him play just limited time in playing games on the computer because he has a lot of things to do such as his homework, and his assignment for school.
Secondly, it has detrimental physical health children. According to Kaiser Foundation found that the average 8 to 18 years old spends 7.5 hours per day in the front of the computer this led to lack physical activities leads to healthy problems such as obesity. Obesity leads to many problems like heart attack, blood pressure, and cholesterol problem. No matter what circumstance students have, they can keep healthy life by taking a few minutes to exercise, Therefore; they should not spend most of the time in the front the computer. The exercises help the students to relax and relieve their stress that they are experienced t schools, and be able to go to school more energetic. Moreover, it helps them to focus and concentrated on their study since they are relaxed for better future. As the example that I mention before about my son, in the period that he addicted all the video games, he gain a lot of weight since he does not like to go outside the home to practice some exercise, and he got diabetes but after I controlled what kind of the video games he should watch, arranged the time for playing video games and the time for exercising, he cured and he lost the weight that he has gained. The health all the wealth we have that is why we should care about it.
Finally, spending the children most of their times in the front of the computer which led them to exhibit social deficiencies, they do not like to speak with their parent which cause a gap between children and their parent. This gap in the relationship will destroy the communication between each other that lead them to struggle when they are facing problems in their life since the parents are the only one they love their children, care about them, and their dreams to see their children are the best. The video game takes away the time they should spend with their parent. This time is really important because they can discuss many issues such as their future and about their relationships with their friend. They can give them devices that help them to avoid mistakes.
As all things considered, It is true that the video games let the children have a lot of fun and learn a lot of valuable things but when it comes to its demerits are far outweighs its merits due to setting in the front of the computer for a long time led them to exhibit disruptive and hostile behaviors, cause a lot of diseases, and loss of their communication with their parent. Therefore, the parent should control the time and the kind of video games they should watch it.
Essay evaluation report
Playing games are considered an instrument
Playing games is considered an instrument
videos games has liked
videos games have liked
my son Steven has 6 years old;
my son Steven is 6 years old;
Sentence: As the example that I mention before about my son, in the period that he addicted all the video games, he gain a lot of weight since he does not like to go outside the home to practice some exercise, and he got diabetes but after I controlled what kind of the video games he should watch, arranged the time for playing video games and the time for exercising, he cured and he lost the weight that he has gained.
Description: The fragment he gain a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace gain with verb, past tense
flaws:
No. of Words: 753 350 //Write the essay in 30 minutes.
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 753 350
No. of Characters: 3467 1500
No. of Different Words: 311 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.238 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.604 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.962 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.707 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Playing games are considered an instrume...
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Line 1, column 548, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...ames are having negative repercussions. Some of the disadvantages will be outlined in follo...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... be outlined in following paragraphs To begin with, videos games has liked be...
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Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'is 6 years old'.
Suggestion: is 6 years old
... at schools. For example, my son Steven has 6 years old; he used to sit in the front of compute...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mework, and his assignment for school. Secondly, it has detrimental physic...
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Line 5, column 902, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
...hat he addicted all the video games, he gain a lot of weight since he does not like ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...that is why we should care about it. Finally, spending the children most of t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...es that help them to avoid mistakes. As all things considered, It is true tha...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'whereas', 'for example', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as well as', 'it is true', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241717791411 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.164417177914 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0748466257669 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0282208588957 0.046263068375 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0907975460123 0.0685040099705 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128834355828 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0343558282209 0.0351676179071 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50972715225 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0368098159509 0.0309702414327 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0895705521472 0.0887237588012 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0134969325153 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0159509202454 0.0139019557991 115% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4326.0 2387.08602151 181% => OK
No of words: 754.0 408.028673835 185% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7374005305 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.24013935268 4.48200974243 117% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.286472148541 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.216180371353 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151193633952 0.174417080927 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0848806366048 0.112833075102 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50972715225 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 328.0 212.727598566 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435013262599 0.524397521467 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 55.9827667811 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 30.16 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.165747685 48.84282405 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.04 120.699889404 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.16 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.72 0.644075263715 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 51.7780371353 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.42857142857 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322386725162 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140867880945 0.103427244359 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0905852137282 0.0752933317313 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527517759437 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192274259448 0.151897553556 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131151675938 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535729939394 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.484086658938 0.336927656856 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0458686493363 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23057991239 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338678205393 0.0618886996521 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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