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There has been some debates among whether the electronic data base is beneficial or not.
The lecture says that keeping the medical records of the patients electronically is not beneficial. However, the reading opposes this point by saying that keeping the data base of the medical records saved electronically is beneficial.
The first point of dispute is if the electronic medical records will save money or not. The lecture claims that patient's record should be saved on paper for backup. Also, some papers records are signed by the patients so they have to be kept in the paper form. Thus, the doctors will spend more money for the storage places. However, the reading refutes this point by saying that electronic records will save money as they are easily accessed by the doctors at any time and they do not need a space for storage.
Another controversial issue is if the electronic records will prevent errors or not. The professor contents that most doctors write their notes by using pen and paper, then the stuff interpret this hand writing to electronic records. So the poor human's mistakes will not be prevented. But the author of the reading disagrees, he says that the electronic medical records will reduce the chance of errors as they are in standardization form and legible computer fonts.
The final point of dispute is if the medical records will aid the researchers or not. The lecture claims that it is difficult to access the medical records of the patients. There are a lot of strict rules and permits needed. The patients can easily lock their records except for their own treatment. Yet the reading refutes this point by saying that the medical records will help the researchers by gathering more information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...l records of the patients electronically is not beneficial. However, the reading ...
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...s saved electronically is beneficial. The first point of dispute is if the ele...
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... that patients record should be saved on paper for backup. Also, some papers re...
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...e saved on paper for backup. Also, some papers records are signed by the patien...
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...on paper for backup. Also, some papers records are signed by the patients so th...
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...they do not need a space for storage. Another controversial issue is if the el...
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...ation form and legible computer fonts. The final point of dispute is if the med...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, except for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95364238411 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57709511582 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46357615894 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 443.7 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8984126307 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 7.06452816374 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504507143793 0.272083759551 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190724743225 0.0996497079465 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09886988267 0.0662205650399 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29727712159 0.162205337803 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102600879801 0.0443174109184 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.3589403974 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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