why do people attract to difficult sports
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Dangerous sports are interesting for most people to watch and read about. Only certain kinds of people, however are interesting in participating in theses sport. Often, they are people who love risks, who seek a feeling of power, or who need to deal with some personal problems.
First, dangerous sports attract risk takers. People often take risk in their lives. They take risk with their money, with their jobs, and in love. But this are ordinary risks. Nothing compare to the risk of putting your own life in danger. risking ones lives in on danger sport has a special thrill that is very attractive o someone.
In addition, Dangerous sports attract people who want to feel a power. It is a great accomplish to climb a difficult mountain or to learn how to sky dive. When people do these and still end up alive, they fell like they have conquered the force of nature. What felling of power must give them.
Finally, I think dangerous sport attract some un happy people. People who do not like their job or who have problems with their families may turn to dangerous sport as a way of dealing with their problems. Learning something dangerous may or difficult make them fell worthwhile. It can give them something interesting to focus their attention on.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, while, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 1977.66487455 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 219.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80365296804 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40962258284 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611872146119 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 618.680645161 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.500834687 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.8823529412 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8823529412 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270884159989 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901875948851 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768525606894 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175895131712 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444199113998 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.67 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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