Nowadays children are surrounded by a plethora of source of entertainment and attraction. And as a compelling example computer games which are widely used today. In my opinion I think that it is no matter to let kids play with it but in moderate way. And I will explain my point of view in the following essay.
Firstly, children bored easily thus, they need to be entertained all the time either by toys or other activities. Computer games are one of those, which there is many games developed for an educational purpose, and if they used in accurate way kids will benefit.for example games which teach kids alphabet and numbers in early age or more games that need a brain reflexion.
Secondly, parents must be involved in this entertainment and assume their mean role which is controlling their kids, by determinating the time of playing and kind of games as well, and more than that play with theme sometimes, and a give my experience as a example when I was kids I used to play a memory games that chows a different identique pictures than ask you to remember theme. I thought that it was just a game but it helped me too much in my studies because it refine my memorie.
In conclusion, I think that computer games are not necessarily a waste of time , if it used moderately it can be a great help in children intellectual development and might used as a canal to pass a good values.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1150.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58167330677 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74945882121 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557768924303 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.248352153 48.9658058833 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.777777778 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 5.45110844103 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213982141386 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829188514725 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458952718594 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131685539343 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179015695774 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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