Traveling is the most enriching activity a person can practice. It is always joyful to travel in your country and around the world. Now concerning the given statement: “People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries,” I disagree.
First, although it is important for people to know their country first, such as its culture, it is also important to know cultures of other countries. I will give an example of my own experience. I moved to Australia seven years ago. I used to live in Argentina, an amazing country located in Latin America, whose culture is very different from Australian's. It was a great shock culture when I first came here since I did not know anything about Australian culture. If I had had the opportunity to travel before, I would have realized how different these countries are from each other. In other words, now I know from my own experience that it is mandatory to know the culture of the place you will live before you move in order not to get surprised.
Second, when you travel to foreign countries you have the opportunity to know different perspectives of life that maybe you have not considered before. I will give an example that illustrates this very well. My friend Mery has travelled around the world since she had twenty years old. Now that she is almost forty, she has visited more than eleven countries. During these years she has collected several friends that taught her significant lessons. She now knows how to appreciate the experience of life in a different way. She has learned how to find the positive side of every problem she copes with. The local people she knew during her trip to Africa were people who even though suffered hunger, they were very happy. They had a very strong mind to overcome those serious difficulties.
In conclusion, life is more interesting when you can travel around the world. The lessons you can learn from people you know during trips are precious as well as their cultures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , &apos
...than from traveling to foreign countries,' I disagree. First, although it is i...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
.... I moved to Australia seven years ago. I used to live in Argentina, an amazing c...
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Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'been twenty years old'.
Suggestion: been twenty years old
...as travelled around the world since she had twenty years old. Now that she is almost forty, she has ...
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Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ow to appreciate the experience of life in a different way. She has learned how to find the positi...
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Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ople she knew during her trip to Africa were people who even though suffered hunger,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, well, in conclusion, such as, you know, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83285302594 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63814870397 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512968299712 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0766809748 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8571428571 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5238095238 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27577861999 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807489887834 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911761439918 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207776134479 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112526352929 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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