In today's economical system, managing money is the most required ability to become a financially responsible adult. It is expected to think that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age to become financially responsible in their adult ages. I agree with this idea, in my humble opinion, with considering the challenging situations in the economy, indeed, children must learn how to manage their money for several reasons.
Firstly, childhood is a transition stage to become an adult, and as managing money is one of the most important abilities that adults have to learn for living in a comfortable life, learning at a young age would become easier than learning later. In fact, children are capable of developing numerous skills at younger age. Besides several other abilities, such as how to speak properly with a person in their social environment, parents can teach how to manage their own money. Some psychological researchers are able to design numerous experiments where it allows them to compare and claim that children's learning abilities at younger ages is higher than the adults' learning abilities. Therefore, people would benefit more in their adult ages from learning money management in their earlier ages in childhood.
Secondly, people who acquire money management skills in their earlier ages, as they take responsibilities as an adult earlier, could adapt to the world easily. Since parents give the responsibility of saving money and use their money appropriately, children become aware of the importance of finance, in general. Moreover, the adults whose ability has been developed earlier would also teach their children how to manage the money, as a result, the new generation will be able to use improve the economy. Thus, future adults would appreciate that their parents since they have become reasonable adults who make good decisions in their life thanks to responsibilities that were given by their parents.
In conclusion, children should learn to manage their own money because their capacity to gain ability grand to learn easily. Consequently, future adults are aware of the proper usage of money and appreciate their parents who gave the opportunity for taking responsibilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
In todays economical system, managing money is the most requ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in fact, in general, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30056179775 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84903338448 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497191011236 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.9022794178 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.785714286 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32810246558 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151286789498 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861120364627 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244850217673 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800309618578 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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