Nowadays life is complicated. A lot of people wants to make a living. It is important to teach children at young age how to manage their own money to become successful and responsible financially. Therefore, I agree with the statement because children will learn discipline, how to overcome obstacles.
First of all, children will learn discipline in future if they learn it from childhood. They will know how to control and how to use money. Someone who taught either in school or by parents about money management are successful today. A good example is when I compare my self with my older brother. My father forced me to attend some classes when I was ten years old about "how to control yourself when it comes to money." These set of classes taught me a lot of theories and ways that I use them nowadays. It instructed and gave me the direction in managing my small family. On the other hand, my older brother is in trouble. He spends his salary within two weeks. He owned me $3000 and that is mainly because he does not know how to use his money wisely. Therefore, my father always says that I am responsible more than my older brother.
Secondly, children can overcome any obstacles they will face in future. Someone who taught about bad experiences that some people faced. He or she will learn from it to overcome any issue that he or she will face in future. For instance, one the stories that I had learned is a man called Michael. His father has a company and usually take Michael with him to attend meetings even though he was only 12 years old. Once he heard something he did not know. He search about it. After some years, his father died and the company lost a lot of money. The good news is that Micheal overcome this crises in a few months because he learned from his childhood some concepts of management. Therefore, he is a responsible adult that can face the complicated life.
Finally, teaching children from childhood is a way for training them for future to overcome any issue they will face in this interesting life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the future
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Suggestion: searches
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60762942779 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54211897136 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50136239782 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.838432093 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.64 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.68 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138427801316 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041802933222 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612316809806 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106013541791 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954233687863 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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