tpo-17: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The science of marketing has seen major advancements in the recent decades due to the industrial revolution and mass production. Many new items have been developed and needed to be introduced to their target customers. As a result, commercial advertisements are around us everywhere. Big billboards on the freeway, phone calls, TV shows dedicated to certain merchandise and most importantly online ads. However, the question usually arises among consumers about whether or not the information presented in commercials are accurate or a little exaggerated than reality. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that advertisements often depict goods better than they actually are. I feel this way for reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it's much easier than before to create unrealistic designs using technology such as photo and video editing applications. Thus, companies are encouraged to allure purchasers by how their product is unique and better than other competitors. My roommate experience is a compelling example on what I mean. As we were moving in our new apartment, he needed some drawers for his clothes. Hence, the first thing I advised him to do is to look up online on this extra popular website where prices are even lower than department stores and they offer free delivery on most of the products. Consequently, my friend found it a good idea to do that. After browsing through many webpages, he landed on one item which was affordable and appeared of genuine quality in the pictures. Nevertheless, when we received the delivered package, it turned out that the images did not reflect the actual size for the set. Therefore, we had to return the item back to the company since it was very tiny and it was not convenient to keep any clothes in it. This incident illustrate how firms employ new visual techniques just to attract more buyers.
Secondly, no laws that prohibit organizations from representing misinformation about their products or services. In addition, corporations depend on fine print to deceive viewers. Besides, desguising product details in lengthy contracts that no one has time to read and understand. For instance, wireless companies may advertise how their connection is faster than others, but in order to get the fastest service, you have to pay more. what's more, they can also hide that during peak hours the speed would go down unless the customer ask. Had the government enacted rules to force these businesses to stick to what they say in the commercial, people would have never fallen into these traps.
To conclude, I agree with the statement that traders would take every chance to have their product look better than any other competitor utilizing technology However if legislators take action and pass legislation to stop dishonesty about the advertised goods costumers would get a better picture of what they are buying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, i mean, in addition, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2456.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14884696017 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8261808722 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637316561845 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4635294639 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45833333333 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195289702534 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431705687771 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587490236583 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11466351966 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315639819827 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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