There is a great debate between real life and TV, for example as people are now in a new time with new advents, they only want the most updated, however, the newest can changed the products they want to buy. As far as I am concerned, actually advertisements from Tv or any other mean make products seem much better than in reality they are, because adds show the best part of those products and usually have a great convincing speech which draw more and more people.
First of all, it is common knowledge that advertising companies have the goal of recommending products, due to the fact that they are contracted for this. For example, when I had my rock band, I wanted to spread my disk out throughout Ecuador, for that reason, I decided to get an advertisement from a company called PUBLISHER, the design cost fifty dollars and the speech thirty more. The time past and my disk reached all Ecuador making my band famous. That is how adds achieve large number of people and get them believe which is the best product. But, keep in mind that the product also have an importance, it should be good.
Second, it is true that many say “I will rely on my product, and I will succeed” which is not false at all. However, this will be really difficult to attain. If you go along with an advertising agency you can short the path through a good speech transmited to all your target public. For instance, Returning to my band’s example, I had to record a convincing message –of course, helped by the company- presenting my product with effective words. In this way, people could get drawn immediately after heard it.
To sum up, I really consider that advertisements brings a more intersting sight than the product itself, because they show the best side of it and have the accurate words to convince people to buy it. As a result, in most of the cases, it is appreciable the difference between real products and products on tv, but tv recommended products are more sold.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his will be really difficult to attain. If you go along with an advertising agency...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, of course, as a result, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64305949008 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57602583911 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57223796034 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9491188049 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.071428571 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174936789574 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573947087606 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420172038761 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112263340305 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430014577008 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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