Some people believe that a professor is a fundamental piece in education due to their great added value on students’ knowledge. However, I believe that in order to improve the quality of education, universities should focus more on important factors such as technology and student’s support –competition gifts, scholarships, and so forth.
First of all, using the technological-development method, universities would be able to provide their students with a better environment in class and better resources. In fact, I have read something of Waterloo (a University of Canada). This uni has a multi-study environment such as natural areas, games zones, and so on; and also combines physical classes with virtual classes, which let students consolidate what they have learned. Therefore, I consider that it would be a good idea if educational places improved education in this way.
Furthermore, it is common knowledge that students work better when they are encouraged, so if the university gave them any kind of support, they would improve their way of studying. For example, when I was in the high school, I was given a scholarship, but if I decreased my exams scores, I would lose it, so I study a lot to keep that scholarship. This is how universities should invest their money in order to get better students. another important measure to make would be students competitions in which students who win should be given a gift or a monetary incentive.
In conclusion, I do not think that universities should spend money on professors’ wages, instead, they should spend more on improve infrastructure and virtual-work conditions, moreover, educational centers should offer more student’s support so as to get the smartest and most dedicated students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Another
... money in order to get better students. another important measure to make would be stud...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hould offer more student's support so as to get the smartest and most dedicated stu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33451957295 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45384986824 2.67179642975 129% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576512455516 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4050970726 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.272727273 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.45110844103 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168472582005 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692350735602 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598790606332 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114477158747 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370731343402 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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