Being well-known is not something easy to reach in these days, this demands to be really skillful in scenics arts and also to be different in order to achieve a great place in the celebrity panorama. But, who is more interested in celebrities younger people or older people? Personally, I strongly believe that people around 18-25 are more drawn to know about famous people’s opinions because they are more on the side of tendencies and have experienced the technological advance, which is the base of the celebrity world.
First of all, it is common knowledge that today teenagers share the same likes for music, movies, and Tv. As a result, they need to keep up with the News about who they are following. For instance, I like Messi’s plays, I am a sincere fan of that man, so, I need to know everything about his day-to-day life, what is said about him? who is he hanging out with?. Therefore, I (a young guy) am interested in knowing about this celebrity’s life. If I asked my grandpa about Messi’s life, he would not care about it.
Second, young people from today belong to the Generation X, for that reason, in their childhood and adolescence, they could see the ongoing technological advance which provided them too many resources, one of them is TV and its reality shows. Normally in shows of this kind, some people comment about famous people’s lives, and it is obvious that these shows are made for younger people rather than older people. For example, yesterday my grandma told me how technology has changed people’s lives in the worst possible ways, and also she told me that Mariluna an Ecuadorian reality show is garbage.
In conclusion, I agree that the opinions of celebrities are steering to younger people because they consider more important celebrities lives than older people. Technological advance and tendencies make stronger the reasons why I agree with this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Who
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Suggestion: am
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9751552795 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82760180546 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6966781806 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.230769231 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184843367948 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770442513816 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813138478525 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139633381685 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0877099071356 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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