TPO-17 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Advertisements play an important role in our ongoing life since all of us know many people who have bought several products with the influence of them. If it is asked whether most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are, or not, due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general agreement on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of conviction that they make products look better and sometimes nicer. I have this opinion for at least one major reason which I will aptly substantiate in the following paragraph.

The main reason is that they do that because it's their instinct. They are being produced in order to encourage people to buy the product. Hence, it's their duty to make the goods look nicer. If I want to be more clear, the purpose of companies to present advertisements is to accumulate more wealth and it is not possible if they don't make the goods seem cooler. For example, I remember when I started to establish my third company which was a chocolate company, one of my counselors suggested I should find a proper and attracting attention advertisement. When I mentioned to him that there were some other tasks which we had to perform at the time he insisted and told: " you won't regret that just do what I say". I talked with an advertisement company to propose a suitable ad which prompts people to think that our chocolates are something better than others. But I knew that the chocolate which my company used is the same as the one which others utilized. In the end, the advertisement released and the result was fantastic. All the people in the county and even the country wanted to buy our chocolates and we could earn a lot of money. As you can see, people wouldn't have become enthusiastic to buy our chocolates, if the advertisement weren't exaggerative.

To put the issue into perspective, in spite of the fact that some may think advertisements aren't exaggerative, I strongly believe that they really are. I have this point of view because I think it's their duty and they should be like this.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ain reason is that they do that because its their instinct. They are being produced...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...urage people to buy the product. Hence, its their duty to make the goods look nicer...
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Suggestion: don't
...e wealth and it is not possible if they dont make the goods seem cooler. For example...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
... a lot of money. As you can see, people wouldnt have become enthusiastic to buy our cho...
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Suggestion: weren't
...uy our chocolates, if the advertisement werent exaggerative. To put the issue into ...
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Suggestion: aren't
...fact that some may think advertisements arent exaggerative, I strongly believe that t...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...have this point of view because I think its their duty and they should be like this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, third, thus, at least, for example, i think, in spite of, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69209809264 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80671939319 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539509536785 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0333978333 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.294117647 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199446591935 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629459153645 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551171791296 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143785437033 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720698298036 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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